can't decide what i shud go with. . .

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  1. hexedprojekt
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    i'm starting to get more and more interested in creative writing and have started to outline two different stories, but with work and such i don't have as much time as i would like to work on both at the same time, just want to know if anyone has input on these two ideas for stories started and what one i should put more effort into.( i apologize for lazy inconsistent grammer and spelling corrections)

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    The god Sendra of all existence is bored within his realm of power becoming more and more twisted and further darkened throughout the ages as her creations similaraly fall deeper and deeper into oblivion , deciding one day to run a game creating thirteen people and animals with and special abilities and infusing them with ancient spirits of the past( who have been sitting in her realm of torment).the god sets his game into motion a life time in the making, the rules simple kill all other contestants and their spirit gets to live free in the world, lose and the ancient spirit and physical body gets torn back into his dark Realm of Torment. The time limit they have three months once the first spirit reaches his or her 18th birthday in the physical realm, to find and kill each other spread across the country of Present day Tokyo. Sendra post Guardians throughout the country of Tokyo to ensure her twisted game goes as planned. Though the Spirits won’t be able to recognize eachother throught physical forms they can detect eachothers spectral scent.


    2.Set in the near future, after the economic recession of 2008 put America and slowly the rest of the world into a deep chaos the world slowly became consumed by ghettos with everyone looking out only for themselves, losing faith in all forms of governments. On the new isle of Wendria (old England) is where the story takes place. The isle Wendria is jammed packed full of immigrants from all over the world looking for a new home. Though Wendria isn’t much better, and the only Form of entertainment to people is the playground, a brutal blood sport where gangs of children are the combatants brutally killing each other for food, drugs, sex, and greatness.
     
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    ??? Id go with the firsT :eek:
     
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    gangs of children are the combatants brutally killing each other for food, drugs, sex, and greatness.
    ??? Id go with the firsT



    i liek to write shock/dark themed type of stuff
     
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    I gotta admit I liked the way the second one started and it made a very good story setting up until you mentioned the gangs of children. Children just seems like a bunch of 8 year olds running around with sticks, just not very believable. I'd set it more battle royale age range. High school.
     
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    thanks sokar, i guess i worded it wrong, as i did put it at the age of battle royale 14-16 yr olds i shud have said teens over childern.