Super serious application

Now, this is a story all about how
My life got flipped-turned upside down
And I liked to take a minute
Just sit right there
I'll tell you how I became the prince of a town called Bel Air

In west Philadelphia born and raised
On the playground was where I spent most of my days
Chillin' out maxin' relaxin' all cool
And all shootin some b-ball outside of the school
When a couple of guys
Who were up to no good
Startin making trouble in my neighborhood
I got in one little fight and my mom got scared
She said 'You're movin' with your auntie and uncle in Bel Air'

I begged and pleaded with her day after day
But she packed my suite case and send me on my way
She gave me a kiss and then she gave me my ticket.
I put my walkman on and said, 'I might as well kick it'.

First class, yo this is bad
Drinking orange juice out of a champagne glass.
Is this what the people of Bel-Air Living like?
Hmmmmm this might be alright.

But wait I hear there're prissy, wine all that
Is Bel-Air the type of place they send this cool cat?
I don't think sow
I'll see when I get there
I hope they're prepared for the prince of Bel-Air

Well, the plane landed and when I came out
There was a dude who looked like a cop standing there with my name out
I ain't trying to get arrested
I just got here
I sprang with the quickness like lightening, disappeared

I whistled for a cab and when it came near
The license plate said fresh and it had dice in the mirror
If anything I can say this cab is rare
But I thought 'Now forget it' - 'Yo homes to Bel Air'

I pulled up to the house about 7 or 8
And I yelled to the cabbie 'Yo homes smell ya later'
I looked at my kingdom
I was finally there
To sit on my throne as the Prince of Bel Air

 

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7. We are hot priates
8. You hurt my feelings
9. Screenys or didnt happen

Welcome to the land of im not quite sure but welcome

 

You're seeing things man

 

I'm going to have to ask that you redo your application and add some real depth to it, on first impressions it looks like a 5 minute job with no real enthusiasm or drive to join the guild.

 

Enthusiasm is a difficult feeling to express via text, but you're the boss so I've done as requested.

 

Enthusiasm to me is showing an interest in said situation, having said that everyone has different views on applications and how they should be written, I personally hold a lot of stock in applicants who go as in depth as possible, which is also written in the read me sticky.

I see you've redone the format of your application and given it some definition, that's a good start but I would really appreciate it if you further elaborated on certain aspects of your application, we'd like to know more about you, we aren't just interested in your achievements and how much time you can drone into a game, we are interested in you as a person also.

 

Yes, I'm aware of the definition - it's the way to express said definition that I find difficult. I can quite clearly state here, that I'm enthusiastic about joining this clan and surely this is as good as spamming the OP with exclamation marks

As for me as a person, as I've said; this is one thing I've never been good at. The best way to get to know me, is to get to know me If that isn't good enough, then I'll accept the outcome my friend.

 

Ok, I'll have to get back to you tomorrow, everyone has logged offline and I'll need to correspond with them before a decision is made.

Hopefully I'll be able to give a decision to you, or atleast arrange a meeting by tomorrow morning.

In the meanwhile, if you do think of anything you can add to your application please do

 

not IF you think...
This application looks to me that you think we accept everyone who can write a few lines.
Get a bit more serious on the answers and like Pana said more in dept because otherwise this won't even reach the 2nd stage.

 

Unfortunately you have been denied, thanks for your interest and good luck finding a legion.

 

supposed to be in an IM to someone else...

Driving and posting from the highway = srs bsns lol

 

Harsh ?..
I expect people who fill in an application to be at least serious about WHY they wanna join XoO.
And besides that.. it isn't that hard to write something about yourself IF you spend some time on it.
Everyone can fill in an application in 5 mins.

 

heh.. that was for an IM...Driving down the highway and posting is bad lol..

I meant to say that you guys are serious in your applications because if you want to be the best only take the best. Anyone can fill out an app and post it, but it takes standing out in your app that will get you noticed.

More in depth apps = a better understanding of the person applying. I agree wholeheartedly with the statments reflected in these posts =D

 

Yeah I wouldn't have accepted this application either tbh. It's all good, see you in game!